Re-written paper

The paper that I am going to rewrite is going to be the literary analysis.  I wrote about my history as a reader and how i have developed as a reader over time.  I think that this paper was good, but that it could be written even better.  I am going to correct my ideas mainly, and strengthen my word choice. I know that if I do this, my paper will become much better. 

In the comments on this paper, they were mainly focused on my ideas and how the paper name and assignment was not as focused on in my paper as it should have been.  I think that I had a lot of good things in my paper, just not the correct ones.  I am going to correct this by putting in the correct information that is actually required.  I am going to correct and strengthen my word choice by putting in more descriptive and words that are not so repetitive.  I know that by the time that I am done, my paper will be fully developed and much better than it originally was.  

Jane Goodall

I think that this book has some major plagiarism issues.  I think that it is extremely hard to not plagiarize  while looking directly at a source.  I feel like this is a sign that she is getting a little old to write books.  She is 78 and still writing, which is really amazing, but if she plagiarizes in her writing and doesn't notice it, she needs to rethink how she does things. I think that it would have been better for her if she had put less information about the plants that came from sources, because her sources were not cited correctly. I also think that her editor should have caught the mistakes that she made.

I think that Jane Goodall and her co-workers should fix this as soon as they possibly can.  I think they could do this very easily.  They should first start by removing all of the errors in her books and correcting them.  They should reprint the new correct copy and put it out to the public in place of the old one that had all of the mistakes.  I then think that she should then apologies to the public for the mistakes that she made.  I feel like this would show everyone that she really did care about her mistakes and would try not to make them again.

Reading Time:
City of Bones, City of Ashes, City of Glass, by Cassandra Claire (reread these for the discussion thing)
around 9 hours total

Nervous Conditions Thoughts

I think that Nervous Conditions should be included on next years syllabus.  I personally did not find the book in my "Best Books of All Time" list because it seemed like nothing interesting happened until the very last chapters.  I think that the main layout for how we worked with the book was good, although sometimes it was overwhelming at times.  If everything was balanced correctly, everything would go quite smoothly.

I think that it should be included next year because it answers the questions that we focus on during the year very well.  There were many examples as to how to answer the question thoroughly and answering the questions were extremely easy.  I think that this book represented the answer to the question that we have been asking all year the best.  I think that this is important for how we view the book and how we answer the questions.

I think that when you give them the options of choosing what they do, you should make sure they understand the purpose of all the assignments.  For the annotating assignment, you should make sure that the kids realize what the point of annotating is and how it is supposed to help you.  This can help people who do things like me not spend 4 hours on just the first C layer.  I think that this partially happened to me was because I did not completely understand the point of the annotations.  I just wrote down what was happening in the book.  After you explained to me the purpose of the annotations, they helped me more during the rest of the book.

I think that the way that we worked with Nervous Conditions was good because it gave us some choices in what we wanted to do and what we thought we could do the best in.  I think that the fact that there was some variety made things a little bit more interesting for us because in most classes, we don't get to make a playlist for every chapter we read. I liked the way that this was done and I hope to do it again at some point.


Time spent on A and B layers: 2 hours and a half total (includes movie and writing time periods)

Cake and Spankings on Birthdays

I am going to eat a piece of cake every single day this week.  I have it all planned out.  On Monday, it is my little sister, Abbe's birthday.  So naturally we would have a cake.  On Wednesday, it is Richard and my birthday, but out little brother, David, has a baseball game, so we are celebrating on Tuesday, so we will have another cake.  One Wednesday, I am going to bring a cake to Latin just to make sure that I have some cake every day this week.  On Thursday is Pie day.  In math, we have to make something that relates to pie day and bring it to class to eat.  I am going to make a cake, so when I eat it, I will be eating my piece of cake for Thursday.  On Friday, I am going to eat some leftover cake so that I can make sure that I finish the week that I planned for cake eating.  On Saturday, I am going to make a cake so that I can continue with my cookie eating.  On sunday, I still have to figure out when I am going to eat cake.  I might just have to eat left overs.  I don't want to eat a lot of cake, so the pieces that I eat will be really really really tiny.  

Every year on your birthday, my uncle gives you spankings.  They were always terrible.  On more than one occasion, they have been so hard that the sibling being spanked has cried.  Both of them were boys and they were not happy at all. But it has all been done in the spirit of fun, and everyone loves it unless they are the ones being spanked.  One year, we got my uncle a paddle to spank us with and we all signed it..except me, so I couldn't get spanked with it.  When I was 12, I made a contract that said that he could not spank us past 13.  That year, I wrestled with him so much that it took about 20 minutes for me to get all of my spankings and he got so hot that he had to take off his nice work shirt and only wear is pants and an undershirt.  He was actually sweating by the time that he was through with me.  He got Richard really fast.  This year, my dad and mom said that it is a good thing he doesn't spank me anymore because they don't think that he could actually catch me.  And even if he did, he wouldn't be able to hold on long enough to actually spank me.  It works out quite nicely for me.  Being the oldest of all the kids in our family, Richard and I get to watch everyone else suffer the spankings.  It is always a pleasure to watch! 

How Different Places effect me

There are different places that I go that affect me in some way.  The ones that probably have the most effect are my home, my school, and my church, and track practice.  These are the places that I spend the most time and so they would naturally have some effect.

My home is where I have grown up.  It is where I have always been for as long as I can remember.  My whole family lives on the same street, and they are often at my house.  They influence me and show me how to be responsible and teach me to be the best person that I can be.  My school is where I am encouraged to work hard and make good grades.  It is where all my friends are and the majority of my family goes there too, so it has a big influence on me.  Church influences me to worship God and live my life as pure as I can and to put others before myself.  This is something that has been taught to me sense I was little.  I am also greatly influenced at track practice.  Every practice, Coach Dupe and Coach Cole have a quote of the day and they always have a meaning.  Every quote is designed to teach us a life lesson that we can apply to make us better people.  They are both more interested in the people that we become rather than how good we are at track.  We are encouraged every day to work our hardest and put forth our best efforts in everything we do, which is something that I have always tried to apply in everything I do in life.  I have learned a lot from each of these places, and I love them all very much.

Nervous Conditions: 2 hours total with all C layer things

Nyasha

Hi.  My name is Nyasha. I am Tambu's cousin.  I am really excited about her coming to live with us.  It will be nice to have another girl in the house.  When she first walked in the door, she looked kind of overwhelmed, but she was trying to hide it.  I don't get why she was so amazed with everything.  We don't have that much.  But I guess she is not used to living in such a nice house sense her family is so poor.  I feel like she feels how I felt when I had to go to her house.  I was really scared.  I didn't remember any of her language, and I didn't remember any of her traditions.  I just felt kind of out of place.  Now she sees how I felt.  I wonder if she will be ok with my smoking? I hope she doesn't tell my parents.  They would KILL me!  

It will be nice to have another girl to talk to.  I can get very lonely sometimes.  I am also excited to have another friend.  I don't have very many at school, but at least I have my cousin.  I hope things can be fun and not all awkward between us.  She will hopefully learn our language quickly.  I hope nothing happens to her and she doesn't die like Nhamo.  That was horrible.  I feel so terrible for her and her family, but I don't know what to do about it.  Maybe things will be better this time around.  

Self Evaluation

I think that I did ok with the first C layer section.  On a scale of one to ten, I would give myself a 6 or 7.  I did a lot of it last minute, because I kept putting it off because I had other stuff due sooner in other classes.  This made it particularly hard the night before it was due.

When I do the next sections, I will not due the majority of it the night before.  I will spread it more out.  I will also not annotate as much.  I had started off annotating a lot, but it took soooo much time and so eventually, I had to make it so there were only two or three annotations per page so that I could actually finish annotating the chapters due.

 I was most satisfied with my vocabulary test, because I circled words that I could use throughout my annotating, so I felt like I was the most prepared and did the best job on those.  I felt like the point was for me to be more familiar with the words, and I feel like that I now am.  I was not very satisfied with my annotations, because I felt that at one point, I was just writing things so that I could be done.  I didn't feel like I got anything out of it.

Reading:
Nervous Conditions: In class: 40 minutes
Nervous Conditions: Not in class: 2.5 hours
Nervous Conditions: Time spent working on projects: 4 hours total